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Tuesday, 20 October 2015

Book Launch – CATACOMB – ‘Educate a girl…’

In my ‘Acknowledgements’ for Catacomb I’ve written: ‘My appreciation and thanks to Derek Workman, especially for his insights into Morocco and its people. He actively supports Education For All, a charity that helps girls from the poorest families in the most remote villages of the High Atlas to continue their education…’  I hasten to add that any errors surviving in the book are mine alone…

Derek lived in Spain (where my wife and I currently abide) for many years but he has recently moved to Asia and regularly posts photos of his new home on FaceBook. He still writes travel articles and books. At the end of Catacomb my publisher Crooked Cat Publishing has generously inserted the following:

Education For All

Educate a boy and you educate the man;
educate a girl and you educate a family,
a community, a nation.

To most of us, access to an education beyond primary school never even enters into our consideration; it is simply there, almost by divine right. But what if it wasn’t? And almost worse still, what if it is on offer but you can’t get to it because you live too far from the nearest school or your family is too poor to pay even the basic accommodation costs?

Education For All is a Moroccan-based charity that builds boarding houses so that girls from the poorest families in the most remote villages of the High Atlas Mountains can continue their secondary education. Begun in 2007 the idea was that Education For All would provide for the needs of a number girls for the three years it would take them to complete their secondary education. An apparently modest undertaking, but one that would affect the lives of an initial group of twelve, increasing by the same number each year, in ways that couldn’t have been imagined at the time.

Eight years later and with five houses and over 180 girls to support, Education For All has given girls whose only option in life would have been to stay in their remote village the opportunity to excel beyond their wildest hopes and dreams. EFA has more than proven itself as an organisation capable of improving the lives of those under its care.

  • 80% of the girls who arrived at the EFA boarding house in Asni passed their exams to take them on to study at the lycée.
  • Of the ten young girls who began their education in 2007, seven went on to pass their baccalaureate, and five of those went on to university.
  • 93% exam pass mark in 2014 (almost twice the national average) shows that the organisation is working well and gives confidence to sponsors.
  • Administration takes no fee. All income other than bank charges goes to pay the wages of the house mothers and staff, and the running costs for each house.
Education For All’s premise is that an educated girl can make better decisions for herself and her family, and participate fully and equally in society. Being at an EFA boarding house is, for most girls in the region, the only way they will be able to achieve this. We see how the girls instantly flourish in their houses and achieve great results due to the nutritious meals, warm beds, plentiful learning resources and love and care from staff and volunteers.

It costs 1,000€ per girl per year to ensure the continued development of these otherwise marginalised young girls who would spend the remainder of their life in a remote village with little contact with the outside world and no education. You can download A Different Life – The Story of Education for All at efamorocco.org. To find out how you can contribute contact Sonia Omar at sonia@efamorocco.org

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This heart-warming enterprise flies in the face of many Western misconceptions or perceptions regarding Morocco, and it is to be applauded and hopefully supported.
 
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Book launch – CATACOMB - Time for mint tea

There’s a scene early in CATACOMB – released today, 20 October, by Crooked Cat Publishing –  involving two of Cat’s friends she meets in Tangier, Howard and Gerard. They knew her when she was a model on a fashion shoot in Morocco a few years earlier. The chapter is entitled ‘Russian Blue Cat’ and we take up the story part-way through that chapter:

Howard met her at the arched doorway, a Russian blue cat winding itself round his left leg. “It’s good to see you again, my dear. Do come in – and we’ll do the introductions in the courtyard.” He was tall, with a slight stoop to the shoulders. He had prominent jowls, and a complexion mottled with liver spots, unusually early for someone in his mid-fifties, she thought. Salt and pepper hair was long and covered his ears, falling to his open-necked shirt collar. His eyes glinted blue-green.

He led them along a short warren of passageways hemmed in by high walls and moments later emerged onto a much narrower passage, dimly lit; then through an arch they stepped into a covered courtyard, its walls decorated with intricate arabesques and glazed zellij tiles. The floor tiles were a mixture of blue and ochre patterns, representing the sky and the land. A little way along the edge of the wall, earthenware pots stood crammed full with gum and false pepper trees, jacaranda and creepers and assorted thick shrubs.

A large empty bird cage stood next to six metal chairs that surrounded a large round table; on it lay a big brass tray, a steaming kettle, a pewter basin, three bowls for sugar, mint and tea leaves, three brass tea-pots and five glass cups. One chair was occupied by a tortoiseshell cat, dozing.

The introductions were over quickly.

“Time for mint tea.” Howard gently lifted off the cat, put it on the floor; it pranced away. “Please sit! Gerard will do the honours, won’t you, old fellow?”

“I always do, Howard, dear,” Gerard responded. Cat noticed he was familiar with the tea ritual. If offered a glass of tea from a prepared pot, you’re welcome. If the tea was made in front of you, you were very welcome.

Gerard poured a little hot water into the three teapots, rinsed them and discarded the water in the basin; then he added the tea leaves and hot water. “I let it steep for about two minutes,” he explained.

“It is worth the wait,” Howard told Rick.

Then Gerard swirled the teapots and discarded only the water. Finally, he added sugar and mint leaves to each teapot and then boiling water, and closed the lids.

Rick licked his lips. “I can almost taste it already,” he said.

“Soon,” Gerard said, smiling. “Five minutes.”

“I think we’ve lost something in the modern world with all this instant coffee and teabags, don’t you think?” Howard said.

“Yes,” Rick said.

“Too busy to savour life,” Gerard added.

“Quite so, my friend,” Howard replied.

Finally, Gerard poured the golden liquid into the glass cups, letting the stream fall from a reasonable height to cause slight froth.

“Delicious!” Rick enthused, sipping his drink.

Cat noticed that Abdel seemed at ease. Howard had that effect on people; or maybe it was the tea?

“What happened to your parrot?” Cat asked.

At that moment, two black cats rushed up to Howard and jumped onto his lap. Automatically stroking them, he wrinkled his nose. “One of our feline companions ate it – I don’t know which one was the culprit, though.”

She eyed Rick. “My point exactly. Cats make ideal predators,” she purred.

***
Not far from our home here in Spain is a place we call ‘The Arab Tearooms’ – Carmen del Campillo o de los Moriscos which is a pleasure to visit. All manner of teas are served, as well as soft drinks (no alcohol!) amidst the mature gardens – or within an ornately decorated building with many nooks and crannies. The place is an antique collector's paradise.

The admission is eight euros per person, which includes tea and sweet pastries, most of which are daubed in an excess of honey. 

Here too can be found a peacock roaming the grounds, together with cats and dogs and pigeons. All overseen by exceedingly tall date palms. At night, the gardens are subtly lit by lanterns, and we never seemed to be troubled by mosquitos or flies – perhaps the various plants deterred them.



 
 
 
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Book launch - CATACOMB - 'Grateful to be alive...'

Today sees the launch by Crooked Cat Publishing
of the second book in the ‘Avenging Cat’ series
featuring Catherine Vibrissae:

 CATACOMB

Catacomb, a subterranean cemetery:
a place where ancient corpses are found – or new ones are dumped…

After their recent success in Barcelona, both Cat and Rick continue their vendetta against Loup Malefice and his global company, Cerberus, penetrating the lair of Petra Grimalkin in Nice.

But death stalks the pair, as do the dogs of law from the NCA, Basset and Pointer.

Cat’s trail of vengeance next leads to the Cerberus health food processing plant in the Maghreb…  She puts her skills to good use in Morocco where she again confronts the psychotic killer, Zabala.  From the exotic streets of Tangier to the inhospitable High Atlas Mountains, danger lurks and a deadly ambush awaits…

If you haven’t read the first in the series, Catalyst, now is the time – it’s available at an e-book bargain price! (Sorry, the paperback is still the standard price, though still a bargain, folks!)

The third book in the series is Cataclysm and will be published by Crooked Cat Publishing on 15 December 2015.

(Excerpt from Catacomb)

Cat scales a building in Nice in the rain and breaks into Petra Grimalkin’s apartment…

Chapter One: Cat on a hot wet roof

… Opening her belt pouch, she grabbed a slim lock-pick. The apartment door was alarmed, she knew from earlier reconnaissance. But the French window wasn’t. Within seconds, she opened the door, stepped inside, glad to get out of the rain.

            She shut the door behind her as a strong cloying mixture of perfume smells hit her; she shouldn’t be surprised, since one of Grimalkin’s roles was as head of Cerberus’ Cosmetics Division.

            Hastily, she removed from her pack a sheet of polythene, unfolded it and stood on it, so the drips of rain that slid off her would collect there. She unfastened her belt and its pouches, lowered them to the plastic, and these were followed by the backpack. She slipped off her shoes, stripped to her black underwear, removed a small towel and dried herself, all the while studying the long lounge-dining room.

            Overhead lights were on, as she’d noted from the rooftop; the bedrooms and bathroom were also lit. Petra Grimalkin wasn’t cost-conscious or ecologically concerned about wasted electricity.

            Immediately in front of her was the apartment door that opened onto the corridor, complete with spyhole. To her left was a dining table, six chairs, a wall-mounted TV screen, two armchairs, and beyond were three open doors; apartment plans indicated these led to a bathroom and two bedrooms. On her right was a walnut drinks bar with two matching stools.

            A red light flickered on the answerphone on the bar counter, next to a large empty silver ice bucket. Cat resisted the urge to check it. Instead, she hunkered down and from another belt pouch she retrieved her mobile phone, and fitted the earpiece. She selected Rick’s number, and when he answered, whispered, “I’m in.”

            He let out a sigh in her ear. “Good. I reckon you’ve got an hour, that’s all. Zabala’s supposed to be bringing Petra back then.” He’d only been in Petra’s apartment once, before he’d met Cathy, but on that occasion he had located the safe – behind the bar unit.

            “Back from where?” Cat queried.

            “The invitation was for the pair of them to visit an art show, given by one of Loup’s protégés. Then they have to return, collect their bags and fly on to Tangier.”

            “Gadabouts.”

            Rick chuckled.

            Now, Cat noticed a couple of red Samsonite suitcases standing at the nearest bedroom door. She heard a shower dripping, as if in counterpoint to the rain that pattered against the windows.

            She tugged on a pair of latex gloves and then padded across the thick pile carpet, the sensation quite pleasurable for her bare slightly damp feet. She lowered to one knee and swung open a cupboard door. Inside she recognised the type of safe, with its distinctive handle and combination wheel. “Found it.”

            “Glad it’s still there!”

            “Me, too. I’ll be in touch.” She closed the call and tucked the phone in her briefs. Now, for the first time, she would test her safe-cracking skill in earnest. Compared to her other pursuits, this had taken what seemed like an inordinate time to master.

            After she opened the safe, she pulled the phone from her briefs and photographed where everything lay. She whistled softly. On the shelf were several thick bundles of pristine fifty-euro notes amounting to €500,000. At the back, behind the money, was a black velvet bag. She opened it, poured into her palm a diamond necklace and an exquisite gold filigree brooch with a diamond at its centre. It was tempting to take some of this loot, if not all, but she didn’t want anyone to know that the safe’s contents had been compromised. On the floor of the safe were five folders. Fortunately, Petra Grimalkin was Malefice’s bag-lady as well as one of his heads of division, so carried important documents when accompanying her boss; that fact had prompted this latest break-in. Cat grabbed all of the folders and stood at the bar, checking the titles.
            Tangier
            Marrakesh
            Rome
            Durban
            Izmir
Rick had mentioned Tangier; she wondered if he’d heard of Cerberus operations in these other places. She shrugged; no matter. A quick flick through them revealed that every folder contained a half-dozen sheets; they might prove useful in her ongoing war of attrition against Loup Malefice and his organisation.

            Cat diligently photographed each document from the folders, then replaced them as she’d found them, checking with the photo on her phone. She shut the safe door, twirled the combination wheel. Petra Grimalkin wouldn’t be aware that anyone had tampered with the contents of her safe.

            “I’ve got the full details,” she informed Rick.

            “Good. Now, please get out.” She loved him for that, the measure of concern in his tone. Not strident, but firm.

            She returned to the bundle of clothing and her shoes on the polythene sheet. They were still wet, understandably, and a small puddle surrounded them. She dabbed the towel in the puddle, absorbing most of the rainwater, glanced around and spotted the ice bucket and bundled her jeans, T-shirt and towel in there, then carried it to the bathroom. She’d squeeze the surplus water into the bidet. The clothing would be marginally easier to put on then.

            She passed the two suitcases at the bedroom doorway, glanced in.

            The bedding was in disarray. She stopped, puzzled. Perfume bottles lay scattered over the top of the dressing table, a few of them broken. The smell was pungent, even from here.

            Maybe Petra and Zabala had argued.

            She stepped into the bathroom and instantly dropped the ice bucket. Luckily, it missed her toes by inches; it emitted a ringing sound as it rolled over the tiles.

            Cat gagged, felt the bile rising, kicked aside her wet clothes and the ice bucket and rushed to the bidet on her right. She was just in time. Her lunch erupted, her stomach suddenly cramping. She ran the tap, careful not to send the water-stream full force, and washed away her weakness. She clutched the porcelain rim; her heart pounded against her chest as she leaned over. Gradually, she sensed her pulse slow and turned off the water. The strong perfume smell throughout the apartment couldn’t alleviate the powerful stench of vomit in her nostrils.

            Snagging a toilet roll from the rack next to the bidet, she tore off sections and wiped her mouth and nose and then discarded it in the WC bowl, and flushed it away.

            She got to her feet, stood on wobbly legs.

            Trembling, she stared, her heart fluttering. She’d never seen anything like this. Ever. She fumbled at her briefs, gripped the phone. Selected Rick, punched dial.

            “Are you out yet?” Rick asked.

            She shook her head, tears blurring her vision. “Did you see them both leave?” she demanded, her throat raw, dry, her voice croaking.

            “What, Zabala and Petra?”

            “Yes, dammit!”

            “What’s the matter, Cathy?”

            “Well, did you?”

            “No, I’m going on what I overheard in the lobby… Why, what’s wrong?”

            “Petra never went to the art show.” Cat stared at Petra Grimalkin, her naked body eviscerated, lying in the open shower cubicle. A small trickle of blood dribbled off her soaked corpse and snaked towards the plughole. “She’s dead – murdered.”

Chapter Two: Marmalade cat

Her mind reeled as she stood, unmoving, her mobile phone tucked in her briefs, Rick’s words echoing in her mind, “Get out, Cathy. Now!” That was her first instinct, too. But she couldn’t. Not yet. Adrenaline pumped through her veins; she could barely keep her hands steady. Violent death was not something she’d ever encountered. This was only the third dead person she’d seen in her life; her mother’s death had been natural, if premature. Her father was killed in a car crash – murdered, she reminded herself; but he hadn’t looked like this: he had appeared to be asleep, serene.

            Dark red swam before her eyes and she felt as if the whole building vibrated through her bare feet. She struggled to think rationally, to take it all in, to observe.

            Hunched in the corner of the shower unit, her legs splayed out, Petra stared sightlessly at her. That stare gave Cat a jolt. A sheet was bundled at Petra’s feet, soaked with blood and water. The tiled floor all around the base of the shower was wet but mercifully there was no blood outside the cubicle. The shower head dripped droplets of water onto Petra’s head; her brunette hair hung lank and glistened blackly.

            Think! Difficult. She’d known Petra, briefly, and hadn’t liked her. That dislike had intensified when Petra and Zabala held her prisoner in Malefice’s Barcelona office. She shuddered, remembering their catfight on the jetty. They’d struggled, Petra’s vibrant warm flesh against hers, inflicting hurt and pain. It was hard to grasp that this still, pale form, its innards exposed, had been a living, breathing vital person.

            Petra stared. Cat wanted to close those eyes, but didn’t dare go near. She told herself she had no intention of contaminating the murder scene, but she suspected her reason was more primal than that; probably plain fear of violent death. The dead can’t hurt you? If she left traces of her presence, maybe Petra’s death could harm her, Cat thought.

            She screwed shut her eyes and remembered seeing her father in his coffin. Petra’s boss had engineered Daddy’s death. Hold onto that. She gritted her teeth, opened her eyes and looked away.

            Think!

            Her heart fluttered and her stomach scrunched up, as if she’d been punched. Trying to ignore these symptoms, she stooped, picked up her fallen clothing and the towel and hurriedly squeezed tightly each item over the bidet, getting rid of as much rainwater as possible. Would the crime scene people notice the different type of water here? She doubted it. She left the ice-bucket where it was, a mystery for the investigators, and turned, went into the lounge dining-room.

            A little awkwardly, she tugged on her wet clothing and put the mobile in her back pocket. She left the towel on the polythene sheet and came to a decision.

            She returned to the safe. Having remembered the combination, she opened it again and lifted out the bundle of money. Now, there was no sense in not taking this. If Malefice was aware of it, then its loss could be blamed on the murderer. She decided to leave the safe door open.

            Her heart still pounding, she wrapped the money in the towel and tucked it in her backpack. She fastened her belt, slipped on her shoes and removed the latex gloves, and bagged them.

            One last glance. Nothing left behind. The carpet was damp near the French door. She opened the door, and then carefully carried the polythene to the door, tipped the little pools of water onto the balcony floor, then folded the sheet, dumped it in the backpack. She stepped onto the balcony. The wind’s direction had altered by some twenty degrees, and it was light drizzle now. She was so grateful to feel the rain on her flesh, to taste the fresh air, to get away from the cloying perfume smell. Grateful to be alive. But now she must get away.
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Monday, 21 September 2015

Writing - beginnings change

Recently I was tagged by a FaceBook friend to produce 7 lines from page 7 of my Work In Progress, To Be King.  I managed that, but it set me to thinking, as you do.

The original beginning of the WIP is actually now Chapter 2! The point of this post is to highlight that while writing a novel you do not have to feel that you must stick with the beginning you created. There may not be anything wrong with it, but it is always possible a better alternative may present itself as the story evolves. And of course it’s all subjective anyway. Be flexible.

Here is a snippet from the original beginning.

As you will observe, it is fantasy, set in mythical Floreskand, being the second chronicle after Wings of the Overlord:

CHAPTER 2: Contenders

“To see what is right and not to do it is to want of courage.”
Dialogues of Meshanel
 
Lord Tanellor draped his once-magnificent scarlet cloak on top of the overseer’s bloodied mutilated body, and then raised himself into an upright position. He glanced to the crest of the steep, striated Oxor Rift. Through a thin miasma of blue dust, the sun flared dazzlingly, casting various shades of mauve and purple for a brief instant, and then it dropped out of sight behind the jagged rock ridge. He ran the back of a hairy hand across his creased brow, tired and sickened by the senseless death that surrounded him. Death in war he could understand, and even condone, but this, this made his blood boil. Negligence killed these men. And, by his insistence that the miners worked longer shifts during the Kcarran carnival, Saurosen had murdered them as surely as if he’d struck them down himself.

            A few marks away, the towering broad-shouldered Aurelan Crossis busied himself counting corpses. Beyond, Bayuan Aco, the sergeant of the palace guard and ten of his men hauled bodies from the gaping maw of the mine. At the entrance shrine, the Daughter of Arqitor prayed intermittently and also offered a pitcher of water to the men.

            “What’s the tally now?” he asked in a weary voice.

            Aurelan did not raise his flinty grey eyes from his grisly task. He jotted figures in his dog-eared tally book. His voice boomed, a deep bass: “Seventy-four.”

            “So many?” he whispered, in despair. “I fear there are more to be recovered yet.”

            Aurelan shut his book. “Sadly, these are not just numbers in a tally book. I know these men. Two of them even have brothers in my palace guard.” He eyed Tanellor. “Lord, we do not have the time to dig out any more.” Aurelan then stepped over the corpses and moved to Lord Tanellor’s side. His hair was short, cropped, and coppery, the lobe was missing from his right ear, the mouth a cruel line in a pitted face. An old scar ran along the left side of his neck, one of many tokens from his fighting days, Tanellor surmised.

***
And so on…

As a beginning, I think it worked, thrusting the reader into a situation that raised a number of questions. I haven’t shown Tanellor arriving with his men, or the actual explosion. It is colourful, intense with imagery, and reveals tragedy and character. But I felt that here was a missed opportunity; I wanted to study the miners before the tragedy; and I perceived that by doing so there would ultimately prove to be a link to the arcane Underpeople my co-author alluded to frequently… So, the new added beginning starts thus:

Chapter 1: Dust

“Everything in the past died yesterday;
everything in the future was born today.”
- The Tanlin, 204.10

Caged purblind birds sang, their high-pitched tones echoing through the maze of the Oxor cobalt mine tunnels. A mixture of tree trunk and hartwood props groaned as they supported the rocky ceilings.

            “The king can’t deny us our festival,” growled Rujon Sos. His words echoed in this small underground amphitheatre that joined several tunnels. His bare muscular torso gleamed with a sweaty sheen. Though this section only accommodated twelve miners, all of whom now stopped hammering at the rock walls, there were six other dark shadowy entrances to tunnels where more men hacked at the rock and sweated, their implements echoing along the passageways.

            “Like the rest of us, you’re just a miner, a vassal of King Saurosen,” snapped Dasse Wenn, his rat’s nest of a beard dust-covered. His beefy features twisted in distaste, grey eyes full of hate. Sos suspected that Dasse was a weasel – albeit a short brawny weasel – and regularly reported to the king’s minister anything that might earn him a few base coins.

            Saurosen IV had persistently deprived his people of their little pleasures; and now he had banned their annual Carnival. Considering these festivities had taken place without fail annually for 1062 years, commemorating the crowning of Lornwater’s first King, Kcarran, Sos thought the people had taken the edict commendably well, though he doubted if they’d abide by it, merely paying lip-service. He couldn’t comprehend why Dasse was so passive about the king’s contempt for his people.

            “We must withdraw our labour, teach Saurosen a lesson!” Sos’s strident voice echoed through the smalt mine. The tunnel to his left went quiet, save for the chirping of songbirds.

            “The king doesn’t take lessons from minions like us!” Dasse said in a guttural tone.

            Everywhere glimmered with a blue-tinged buttery glow as the candles flickered. Most candles were placed on rock ledges, but a handful of miners wore cloth caps with wax candles fastened to their brims. Each man simply wore a breach-cloth and thick, boiled leather boots, as the temperature deep in the mine was so intense that any clothing would become sopping wet and prove cumbersome and heavy.

            “You miss the point, Dasse,” snapped Sos. “Hear that silence? Most of our shift has downed tools already.”

            “The overseer and his men won’t stand for it. He’ll send for Lord Tanellor, who will bring troops, and they will force those fools back into the mine. We should have no part in that!” Dasse coughed on fetid air that was tainted a faint blue. “The vent shafts are next to useless!” His thin lips curled back in a sneer, revealing buck teeth. “I don’t fancy my head on a spike, Rujon Sos.”

            “That’s often the fate of Saurosen’s spies!” Sos riposted, rubbing a hand over the stubble on his square jaw.

            The others audibly gasped.

            “You’ll regret those words, Rujon Sos!

            “I have witnesses, Dasse. If you’re threatening me…”

            Dasse laughed, arms gesturing. “I’d rather work down here than die. Saurosen can have all the smaltglass goblets he wants, so long as I have a full pewter one in the Pick and Shovel when our shift’s done!”

            “That’s defeatist talk.” Sos ground his teeth together, turned and, gripping his hammer and chisel, scanned the ten other miners. “What say you all?”

            Only murmurs reached him, the whites of the fearful eyes of his fellow miners gleaming. He knew the majority agreed with him; but they also knew that Dasse wasn’t to be trusted.

            He jabbed his chisel at the nearest wooden prop. “Look, at this cankered wood, it’s not fit. We’re working in a death-trap. Lord Tanellor’s begged and pleaded for new material, but Saurosen won’t countenance it!”

            “He’s always been mean with his money, that one,” said a miner on Sos’s right.

            “Aye, and with his favours, as well,” said another.

            “What favours?” another demanded, derisively.

            Sos nodded, and persisted. “Despots like Saurosen can’t be allowed–”

            Allowed?” Abruptly, he was barged by Dasse, shoved to the rock-strewn floor. He felt a stinging sensation across his cheek and brow and stared up into the hate-filled visage of Dasse. His hand came away covered in blood. Dasse brandished his chisel, sitting astride him.

            Sos twisted and heaved before Dasse could deliver another blow, thrusting Dasse off him. Most of the others shouted encouragement to Sos, though not all, he noticed.

            He scrambled to his feet, gripping his hammer; his chisel was discarded somewhere.

Now he felt his back starting to sting: his left shoulder-blade, which broke his fall.

            The pair circled one another. The first heavy impact had loosened Dasse’s long jet-black hair and it now trailed over his massive shoulders.

            “Sweet Arqitor, stop!” called one man.

            “Stop it before someone gets hurt!” another shouted, but neither Sos nor Dasse listened.

            Suddenly, Dasse rushed him, shrieking unintelligibly, wielding his chisel.

            Sos side-stepped smartly, and then slammed his hammer into the side of Dasse’s shoulder as he passed, and swiftly leaped onto the man’s back as he tumbled against a pit-prop.

            The wooden post groaned and the rock above crumbled, small pebbles skittering to the ground.

            “Stop it, both of you!” a man shrieked. “You’ll bring the whole mine down on us! Daughters of Arqitor preserve us!”

            Snatching, grasping, clawing, the pair rolled, hands slipping on sweaty skin, slicing with hammer and chisel, crying out in shrill tones as the tools sank into flesh. Then, within seconds, they both rolled against a small open conduit that collapsed at their pressure and it created a wide entrance that sloped down into blackness.

***
And so on…

One of a variety of hooks a writer can employ for the reader is conflict. In this case I created conflict between Sos and Dasse, which will worsen until they become trapped after the explosion. The scene also contains action, to move the story faster. I touched upon affairs pertaining to Lornwater, its citizens and their ruler, King Saurosen IV. Here, too, a little further in, I could introduce Tanellor and hint at other happenings and intrigues. All before Tanellor walks among the dead (now Chapter 2).

Significantly, these events begin on the same day as the beginning of Wings of the Overlord. It is a parallel separate storyline (as Wings is a self-contained tale that has links and threads to be developed later, some in To Be King, others in subsequent books).

Writers spend a lot of time on the beginning of their novels. It makes sense, to draw in the reader. Beginnings are fretted over more than any other part of a novel – more than the ending, even; because that beginning has been there to tinker with for the duration of the book.

My advice is: ‘…beginnings and endings are very important. But don’t fret over them too much – at least until the book is written. Then you can decide how you want to shape the beginning and ending.’ – Write a Western in 30 Days (p142).
 
As you can see here, an original beginning was eventually replaced (but not discarded). Now that I have the shape of the book planned and I’m 68,000 words into it, it is unlikely that I will alter it again; but it’s always a possibility.

Wings of the Overlord – by Morton Faulkner, hardback (paperback due in December)

 
Amazon COM here

Amazon UK here


Write a Western in 30 Days – by Nik Morton, paperback and e-book

Amazon COM here

Amazon UK here

Some other posts on writing beginnings:



Saturday, 19 September 2015

Saturday fiction – ‘Tidy burglars’

This excerpt is from Chapter 5 of Sudden Vengeance, published in paperback and e-book format by Crooked Cat Publishing, available at the usual outlets. [I could have used the first chapter or two from the book, but they're available to read for free on Amazon anyway.]
 

                          Youth Let Off
                          Judge Wallside dismissed the case against Steven Campion, 17,
                          charged with sexually assaulting his neighbour’s six-year-old girl.
                          “I understand that while you babysat, the girl was provocative in
                          her nightdress,” the judge said.
                          The parents of the child intend to appeal.
                          A Child Protection Agency spokeswoman said, “This sends out
                          entirely the wrong signals. The judge’s comments were
                          wholly inappropriate.”
                          – The Alverbank Chronicle
Tuesday

Hunched over the Formica table, his small bony frame angular and dejected like some wilting flower, Ben Morrison sat in the kitchen, staring at the mail that had floated to the doormat minutes after his wife, Mary, popped out to catch the bus to Pompey. She was visiting her old friend, Jane. She’d said that on her way back she’d drop in on the corner shop to get a carton of milk – “cheaper than from the milkman”. Unspoken was the fact that they needed to watch the pennies because they had no pounds to look after themselves.

Fingers trembling, he slit open the envelope and, though expecting it, he still could not believe the building society intended to repossess their house.

He must have read the formal letter about ten times but it was still the same, though the words began to swirl in front of his eyes.

A terrible gnawing emptiness settled in his stomach. He removed his spectacles and nervously rubbed his eyes and creased brow. A stray lock of greying brown hair fell across his vision. At least I’ve got all my hair, he thought sanguinely. I’ve got little else!

Wasn’t it enough that he’d lost his job, after all these years? No, the society’s managers weren’t running a charity but a business. They didn’t care about people, not really, only their shareholders and dividends... Market forces, that was it. Just like warfare, he thought, and I’m one of the casualties in the bloody infantry!

Last night’s Alverbank Chronicle lay open on the table. To save money he only got the Thursday edition now, for the job vacancies. Face-up, a quarter-page building society advertisement exhorted first-time buyers to take their special offers, to be sucked into the lender’s unfeeling maw, while houses were taken away from existing customers at an unprecedented rate. The small print exonerated them from responsibility or compassion: “your house might be at risk if you cannot keep up payments”.
 
The redundancy money – all £10,000 of it! – had paid off a couple of credit cards and they needed the rest to survive until another job – he laughed – came along. Though it wasn’t likely, ageism was so rife and he was all of fifty-two.
 
Perhaps the building society was right in their assessment. Maybe he was a lost cause, a risk they’d prefer to jettison. He might never get another job, even if the economy perked up. He might never earn enough to repay the loan, at their usurious rates. And, to think, his taxes helped them get out of the mess they had got themselves into!
 
Whatever Mary and I scraped together over fifteen years to pay off the interest will be lost.

He’d worked for a home over their heads, a future for their retirement, but even that had been a house built on sand: the government destroyed his private pension, made it virtually worthless. In fact, all those pension funds had been used to bolster up the top-heavy creaking government machinery of state. All he’d accomplished was to pay out interest to faceless financiers who squirreled away obscene bonuses. Now they had nothing.
 
Ben crumpled the damned standard apology letter into a ball and flung it across the kitchen. It landed on the draining board, amidst the breakfast cereal bowls and mugs. Absently buttoning his fawn cardigan, he walked over and brushed the offending paper on the floor. He used too much washing-up liquid, bubbles overflowing, and when he immersed the dishes he scalded his hands, forgetting to let cold into the bowl. He thrust his fingers under the cold tap then, in violent agitated movements, he washed the dishes.
 
His mind seemed full of cotton wool, like that morning when he drove back from his job in Havant for the last time. He still marvelled how he had managed to arrive home without being in an accident on the M27, because the entire journey was a blank.
 
To be fair, he’d been warned of the possibility of redundancy. And Steve, his shop-floor manager, had been sympathetic about it. The personnel chap, Dave, he’d been understanding, offering to pass on any vacancy details he got wind of, and they would cover the cost of his postage and phone calls that related to his job search. Never did, though, did he?
 
Yet the humane approach still couldn’t lighten the dull dead weight in his chest and, worse, his mind.

Then, he’d wondered how they would manage. Now, he realised, they couldn’t.
 
Ben stared out the kitchen window. Mary’s rockery was looking unkempt. Some of the heather had died. The miniature firs were scorched with frost. Winter was not the best time of year for gardening, he supposed. Not the best time to be left homeless, either. With no family to fall back on, he felt lost, useless. No job, and now no bloody home! He’d failed Mary and most of all himself!
 
God, he thought, I can’t put her through this!
 
He kicked the pedal bin.
 
When he finished stacking the dishes on the worktop, he opened the cutlery drawer and, about to dry the spoons with a tea towel, he noticed his screwdriver and chisel in the side-compartment. “Handy for any quickie jobs,” he constantly explained when Mary Spring-cleaned.

His mouth went dry.
 
Ben picked up the chisel and glanced at the garage access door.
 
*** 
Gulls screeched and fought over food scraps and pecked at a clutter of cardboard boxes on the pebble-covered shoreline.

From the police station’s office window Paul Knight watched them, his thoughts momentarily transported to the graveside.

In complete contrast to the scavenging birds, the station was relatively quiet. He’d had a busy day and didn’t want to meet too many officers. Most had handed over their duties and left. Paul was grateful for that. The first day back after a death or a funeral was awkward for all concerned. The constant expressions of sympathy, while well meaning, wore you down.

Earlier, Detective Inspector Traynor had called Paul into his office. After offering his condolences, he explained that the case officers, DS Rafferty and DC Brookes, might have a lead. Traynor’s long drawn features were lined, the eyes puffy with lack of sleep. Some years back he must have been a handsome man, yet now he seemed haggard. “A bit too soon to commit ourselves, Knight, but we’ll keep you informed of any progress.”

Detective Sergeant Muir had come in to commiserate, too.

“Thanks for attending the funeral,” Paul said.

Muir was portly, his paunch the result of too many bar lunches perhaps, his lips thick and wet, eyes small, bright blue and evasive. He said in a gravel voice, “Oh, yes, think nothing of it, Paul. Now give my regards to your mother, will you?”

“Do you know her, Sergeant?”

“Oh yes, indeed. Met a few times, at the Adult Education Centre. Nice lady.”

“I see. Yes, I will. And thanks.” Paul wondered what Muir had studied but was not inclined to raise the subject. Mum had done art, life-drawing, but couldn’t master the foreshortening perspective, she said, so she gave up, which was unusual – she never gave up on anything else, she wasn’t the sort. As it was while Dad was unemployed, maybe she didn’t want to pay out for any more term-fees.

Paul pulled his attention from the window and the seagulls, and watched Sue White, one of the civilian staff, as she inserted a blank Incident Log form – quadruple carbon-impregnated paper – into the computer.
 
Three of his reports down, one to go, he mused ruefully.
 
The day had been typical: four burglaries, taking down statements, completing the Property Taken form (in duplicate), feeling anger at the sight of the wanton destruction left in the wake of the culprits. Prized possessions trampled underfoot, carpets fouled, drawers and cupboards damaged; the list was endless. And insurance was little compensation. At each crime scene, he kept getting flashes of Gran, of her flat...
 
Of the four reported break-ins he attended, only one seemed to be professional. They took the DVD player, two televisions, and a hallmarked silver cutlery set, but left everything else untouched.

While inwardly he boiled to think these people believed they had the right to steal, he found himself agreeing with the aggrieved pensioners that “at least they didn’t do any damage”!

What have we come to, he wondered, when we feel grateful for being robbed by tidy burglars?

***
I am doing the right thing, Ben Morrison thought. From time to time, he took his eyes off the road to glance at the chisel on the passenger seat. It seemed to offer reassurance.

He drove his old blue Ford Fiesta into town and passed a string of boarded-up commercial premises. There was the empty block once owned by Woolworths, its windows now covered by wooden boards plastered over with tattered old election posters. The only places doing any kind of trade were the fast food outlets and charity shops. The town’s heart had been plucked out of it. He knew how the town felt.

Everywhere were yellow lines – and the car parks charged, which simply dissuaded shoppers from visiting the town. By chance, Ben found a parking spot at the curb opposite the building society. He switched off the engine and waited.

It was dark when he pulled out from the kerb and followed the black BMW driven by Mr. Dilwyn bloody Upperton, the building society manager. A company car, of course, Ben thought. His own car repayments were already a month outstanding. It was only a matter of time before he’d lose that as well.

The car radio played Classic FM, but he didn’t hear; Mendelssohn’s music had no calming effect on him this evening.

He steered the vehicle almost in a dream, keeping the BMW just within sight as they negotiated the evening traffic and headed out of town.

After about thirty minutes, they turned into the new Barrett development on the outskirts, ‘Cormorant Nest’. Five bedroom homes, two en suite bedrooms, double garages, study, games room. Only Two Remaining, proclaimed the billboard.

He drove slowly past as Upperton turned into the wide brick-laid drive of a Georgian-style detached house.

Pulling in a little further down the narrow road, Ben glanced guiltily at the chisel. His heart pounded and his fingers trembled. He felt out of place here, amidst so much executive wealth. It was intimidating. Then he checked the gently curving road. Nobody about. A few porch lights shone with a buttery glow, but the street lamps offered poor illumination.

He carefully put the tool in the pocket of his green anorak and got out of the car. His outer garment rustled at every movement. Eyeing the street, he unzipped it, removed the chisel, put it in his back pocket and flung the anorak on the passenger seat. He didn’t feel the cold; too intent on what he felt compelled to do. No point in locking the door, he thought.

He made his way along the path towards the Upperton house, hurried across the open lawn and quickly slunk into the shadows afforded by a row of evergreen bushes leading up to the back entrance. His heart pounded as he climbed the wrought iron gate, and fleetingly remembered the last time he’d scaled a garden gate, when courting Mary! Then, they’d been young, with the prospects of a good happy future. A gust of cold air caught the area over his kidneys as the pullover rode up at the back. He shivered as he landed on the other side.
 
Within a few seconds, he was out of breath after running over soft soil to the shadows of a small wooden garden shed.

By the time he reached the back of the house, his shoes were quite heavy, caked in mud.

The lights were on in the kitchen, the downstairs lounge and also one upstairs room. Upperton’s probably changing out of his day clothes, he thought.
 
He peered through a gap in the curtain of the French window.
 
Upperton’s blonde wife was in a long lounge, playing with two boys whose ages couldn’t be more than six or seven. A loving domestic scene, which he cast from his thoughts and turned away.

His legs felt like jelly. It wasn’t too late to back off, to get away. Ben reached for the chisel’s firm smooth wooden handle. He moved towards the kitchen’s back door, momentarily warmed by the exhaust fumes from the central heating flue. The kitchen door was closed but unlocked, so he wouldn’t need the chisel after all.
 
He opened the door, stepped inside and, guiltily recalling the recent image of Upperton’s wife, he slipped off his muddy shoes.
 
Heart hammering, he crossed the cushion-floor of the fitted teak kitchen and tensely waited at the ajar door. Squinting through the opening, he confirmed the hallway was clear.
 
Soundless in his stocking-feet, Ben dashed through the hall and up the stairs, sweat pouring in fear as he expected someone to come out and accost him at any minute.
 
He was halfway up when he realised he should have stopped a second to yank out the hall telephone jack. Too late now, though. He continued on up the stairs.
 
Light only showed in the gap underneath one door, at the back of the house. His mouth was very dry as he walked across the landing and opened the bedroom door. The decor was predominantly peach-coloured.
 
Upperton was singing under a shower in the bathroom adjoining the bedroom.

Ben remembered Upperton’s cold, heartless letter of intent he’d received in the mail. Was it only this morning? Heart suddenly hardened, he stepped through the doorway and crossed the thick-pile carpet to the bathroom.
 
On the bed was Upperton’s business suit, discarded like an unwanted shell. Ben wanted to rend the material, cut open the bed’s mattress, but that would be mindless and Mary would never forgive him. No, he would deal solely with Upperton, show the bastard for good and all!

Gripping the chisel in his right hand, Ben pushed the bathroom door wide.
 
Ben Morrison wailed in despair and rushed straight at Upperton as the manager stepped out of the shower cubicle.
 
Overweight, his pink flesh wet and glistening, Upperton was transfixed. His eyes dropped to the weapon in Ben’s hand. He squeaked, “Who the blazes!”
 
Ben hurled the chisel away from him and it clattered noisily into the bath. Upperton flinched as Ben took a step closer, trembling with anger. “You people in your fancy posh houses!” he sobbed. “You have no idea the pain and worry you cause!” He took another step and shoved shaking hands at Upperton’s flabby chest. He pushed, the contact of his palms against cold clammy flesh unnerving.

Upperton exclaimed and overbalanced against a set of weighing-scales. His outstretched hand grabbed the shower curtain, tearing it and the rail down. Upperton fell heavily on the carpet floor, his belly and flaccid sex wobbling.
 
His heart hammering, Ben wiped his hands on his shirt, his throat dry. He turned on his heel and dashed onto the landing and down the stairs.
 
In a final act of frustration, he lashed out with his hand at a Chinese-style vase at the foot of the stairs in the hall. As it smashed on the floor, he wrenched open the front door.

“Dilwyn, what on earth is–?” Mrs. Upperton came out of the lounge and gasped. “Oh, my God!”

Leaving the door swinging open, Ben raced over the grass, the soft moist surface uncomfortable on the soles of his stocking feet. My shoes! But he kept on running.
 
He jerked open his car door and pushed the key in the ignition. He drove away, steering erratically, hands tight-clenched, eyes streaming.
 
He couldn’t do it.
 
Failed even in his attempt at retribution.
 
A complete failure!

***
NOTES:
Chapter headings carry news items based on real events.
Alverbank is a fictional town on the south coast of Hampshire, England.
The funeral was Paul's gran, her death as a result of a robbery.
The reference to Paul’s mother has dramatic repercussions later in the story.
Ben’s ordeal is not over yet, either…

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